The Deeps
In depths untamed, the salamander
weaves their mysterious path
upon a raiment of fire.
In the flickering light, the reptilian
takes on many strange forms,
yet is hidden in this.
The reptilian hides, in arcane fire, then strikes
savagely.
The komodo dragon's languid, merciless stare is steely.
In the desert, the lizard
slithers seamlessly across the sand.
The way of the reptilian is hidden,
and barren, yet in this land
he may move most freely.
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This poem is a stellar piece of poetry, for all (reptilians/time.) Its depiction of the world is as (enlightening/exciting/exquisite) as its use of the sonnet form is (immaculate/classically Petrarchan). From the (opening image of the salamander/imagery of fire upon a lizard), it never looks back, and continues with exotic and (mysterious/sensitive) imagery. Hence, the pathos of the (reptilian/earthly order/subversive) is most fully brought out.
The title (aptly presages the poem with its reference to 'depth'/is slightly New Romantic, however this is quickly redeemed by assimilating this back into terms of contemporary ie. reptilian poetry). The poem itself opens with a reference to the salamander, a peculiar creature; this compounds a sense of the mysterious and exotic developed by the title. It is (incredible/deep/characteristic of the ingenuity of the reptilian mind). Hence, the ('occult'/'eccentric'/'opinionated') character rumoured of the salamander is most clearly exploited. This foregrounds the (poem/masterpiece). The mention of 'depths untamed' and the 'mysterious' salamander compound the sense of (the virtues of obscurity/the reptilian mystique). The poem further examines the salamander's setting: a 'raiment of fire.' Hence, an inconstant element safeguards the salamander's mystery. Hence, the salamander becomes almost an (elemental/incarnation of fire/fire god), its fire lighting the way for the following points.
The reptilian is hence similar to (rumours of cultural Marxism, which rumoured form in fact is merely a skewed interpretation of actual reptilian influence/the 'flickering light,' in its ability to take on 'many strange forms,' and hence also to 'flicker'). Nonetheless, retaining the mystique of the oblique salamander, it remains peculiar in this peculiar form. However, others may not truly comprehend it, at least not (as much as I, the esteemed critic, appreciate the depth of the poem's eternal message and the true wisdom of the reptilian/fully/without complex meditative techniques). Hence, to many this ancient and modern wisdom is a 'closed book.' Yet the author acknowledges this, with their reference to 'arcane' fire. Hence, they are aware of these possibilities.
Their reference to the reptile 'striking' foreshadows the later reference to the aggressive komodo. Hence, the hidden-ness of reptilians is also a threat to others. They are hence 'conspiratorial' in some way, which arises innately. Along with the fire, we have also the image of the (barren desert/desert/exquisitely described desert/barren desert). In this isolation, the reptilian moves freely and in tune with the area. Hence, the reptilian movement is cleverly distilled into a series of (vivid/evocative/perfect) images.
To summarise, this piece of reptilian poetry (does a credit to its kind/is, as is typical for the reptilian in this field, astounding). It gives a fresh, exciting and (reptilian/exquisite/marvellous) take on the elements, one which they should be proud of. While the peculiar choice of rhyming 'freely' with 'steely,' in the final couplet of the sonnnet, might seem out-of-place, they aptly juxtapose these traits of the reptilian in a (striking/careful/vivid) manner. Nonetheless, this is not characteristic, in this poem. It has so few problems, that (a whole genre of poetry could arise around praise of it/reptilians everywhere must celebrate it/it is not for an age, but for all time/its very sight will harm the anti-reptilian hordes/it will be accounted as a historic treatment of the sonnet). Hence, this poem is worth any reader's time. I hope to have illustrated the poem, both in its flaws and its virtues, as clearly as any could.
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To summarise, this piece of reptilian poetry is, as is typical for the reptilian in this field, astounding. It gives a fresh, exciting and reptilian take on the elements, one which they should be proud of.
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I'll get on this task immediately, too busy laughing now! Great task, Zero!
ReplyDeleteI like the recent mix of serious and fun stuff on thiss blog...
DeleteThanks, guys. Have a more 'serious' post coming, although I'll wait a bit as people seem to be adding their entries here.
DeleteThis poem is a stellar piece of poetry, for all reptilians. Its depiction of the world is as exciting as its use of the sonnet form is immaculate. From the opening image of the salamander, it never looks back, and continues with exotic and mysterious imagery. Hence, the pathos of the reptilian is most fully brought out.
ReplyDeleteThe title aptly presages the poem with its reference to 'depth'. The poem itself opens with a reference to the salamander, a peculiar creature; this compounds a sense of the mysterious and exotic developed by the title. It is deep. Hence, the 'occult' character rumoured of the salamander is most clearly exploited. This foregrounds the poem. The mention of 'depths untamed' and the 'mysterious' salamander compound the sense of the virtues of obscurity. The poem further examines the salamander's setting: a 'raiment of fire.' Hence, an inconstant element safeguards the salamander's mystery. Hence, the salamander becomes almost an elemental, its fire lighting the way for the following points.
The reptilian is hence similar to the 'flickering light,' in its ability to take on 'many strange forms,' and hence also to 'flicker'. Nonetheless, retaining the mystique of the oblique salamander, it remains peculiar in this peculiar form. However, others may not truly comprehend it, at least not without complex meditative techniques. Hence, to many this ancient and modern wisdom is a 'closed book.' Yet the author acknowledges this, with their reference to 'arcane' fire. Hence, they are aware of these possibilities.
Their reference to the reptile 'striking' foreshadows the later reference to the aggressive komodo. Hence, the hidden-ness of reptilians is also a threat to others. They are hence 'conspiratorial' in some way, which arises innately. Along with the fire, we have also the image of the barren desert. In this isolation, the reptilian moves freely and in tune with the area. Hence, the reptilian movement is cleverly distilled into a series of evocative images.
To summarise, this piece of reptilian poetry is, as is typical for the reptilian in this field, astounding. It gives a fresh, exciting and marvellous take on the elements, one which they should be proud of. While the peculiar choice of rhyming 'freely' with 'steely,' in the final couplet of the sonnnet, might seem out-of-place, they aptly juxtapose these traits of the reptilian in a striking manner. Nonetheless, this is not characteristic, in this poem. It has so few problems, that it will be accounted as a historic treatment of the sonnet. Hence, this poem is worth any reader's time. I hope to have illustrated the poem, both in its flaws and its virtues, as clearly as any could.
This poem is a stellar piece of poetry, for all time. Its depiction of the world is as enlightening as its use of the sonnet form is classically Petrarchan. From the image of fire upon the lizard, it never looks back, and continues with exotic and sensitive imagery. Hence, the pathos of the subversive is most fully brought out.
ReplyDeleteThe title aptly presages the poem with its reference to 'depth'. The poem itself opens with a reference to the salamander, a peculiar creature; this compounds a sense of the mysterious and exotic developed by the title. It is characteristic of the ingenuity of the reptilian mind. Hence, the 'opinionated' character rumoured of the salamander is most clearly exploited. This foregrounds the masterpiece. The mention of 'depths untamed' and the 'mysterious' salamander compound the sense of the virtues of obscurity. The poem further examines the salamander's setting: a 'raiment of fire.' Hence, an inconstant element safeguards the salamander's mystery. Hence, the salamander becomes almost a fire god, its fire lighting the way for the following points.
The reptilian is hence similar to rumours of cultural Marxism, which rumoured form in fact is merely a skewed interpretation of actual reptilian influence. Nonetheless, retaining the mystique of the oblique salamander, it remains peculiar in this peculiar form. However, others may not truly comprehend it, at least not fully. Hence, to many this ancient and modern wisdom is a 'closed book.' Yet the author acknowledges this, with their reference to 'arcane' fire. Hence, they are aware of these possibilities.
Their reference to the reptile 'striking' foreshadows the later reference to the aggressive komodo. Hence, the hidden-ness of reptilians is also a threat to others. They are hence 'conspiratorial' in some way, which arises innately. Along with the fire, we have also the image of the exquisitely described desert. In this isolation, the reptilian moves freely and in tune with the area. Hence, the reptilian movement is cleverly distilled into a series of vivid images.
To summarise, this piece of reptilian poetry is, as is typical for the reptilian in this field, astounding. It gives a fresh, exciting and marvellous take on the elements, one which they should be proud of. While the peculiar choice of rhyming 'freely' with 'steely,' in the final couplet of the sonnnet, might seem out-of-place, they aptly juxtapose these traits of the reptilian in a careful manner. Nonetheless, this is not characteristic, in this poem. It has so few problems, that its very sight will harm the anti-reptilian hordes. Hence, this poem is worth any reader's time. I hope to have illustrated the poem, both in its flaws and its virtues, as clearly as any could.
This poem is a stellar piece of poetry, for all reptilians. Its depiction of the world is as enlightening as its use of the sonnet form is immaculate. From the opening image of the salamander, it never looks back, and continues with exotic and sensitive imagery. Hence, the pathos of the reptilian is most fully brought out.
ReplyDeleteThe title is slightly New Romantic, however this is quickly redeemed by assimilating this back into terms of contemporary ie. reptilian poetry. The poem itself opens with a reference to the salamander, a peculiar creature; this compounds a sense of the mysterious and exotic developed by the title. It is characteristic of the ingenuity of the reptilian mind. Hence, the 'opinionated' character rumoured of the salamander is most clearly exploited. This foregrounds the masterpiece. The mention of 'depths untamed' and the 'mysterious' salamander compound the sense of the virtues of obscurity. The poem further examines the salamander's setting: a 'raiment of fire.' Hence, an inconstant element safeguards the salamander's mystery. Hence, the salamander becomes almost an incarnation of fire, its fire lighting the way for the following points.
The reptilian is hence similar to the 'flickering light,' in its ability to take on 'many strange forms,' and hence also to 'flicker'. Nonetheless, retaining the mystique of the oblique salamander, it remains peculiar in this peculiar form. However, others may not truly comprehend it, at least not fully. Hence, to many this ancient and modern wisdom is a 'closed book.' Yet the author acknowledges this, with their reference to 'arcane' fire. Hence, they are aware of these possibilities.
Their reference to the reptile 'striking' foreshadows the later reference to the aggressive komodo. Hence, the hidden-ness of reptilians is also a threat to others. They are hence 'conspiratorial' in some way, which arises innately. Along with the fire, we have also the image of the barren desert. In this isolation, the reptilian moves freely and in tune with the area. Hence, the reptilian movement is cleverly distilled into a series of perfect images.
To summarise, this piece of reptilian poetry does a credit to its kind. It gives a fresh, exciting and marvellous take on the elements, one which they should be proud of. While the peculiar choice of rhyming 'freely' with 'steely,' in the final couplet of the sonnnet, might seem out-of-place, they aptly juxtapose these traits of the reptilian in a vivid manner. Nonetheless, this is not characteristic, in this poem. It has so few problems, that a whole genre of poetry could arise around praise of it. Hence, this poem is worth any reader's time. I hope to have illustrated the poem, both in its flaws and its virtues, as clearly as any could.
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ReplyDeleteMost excellent.
DeleteThis poem is a stellar piece of poetry, for all time. Its depiction of the world is as exquisite as its use of the sonnet form is classically Petrarchan. From the opening image of the salamander, it never looks back, and continues with exotic and mysterious imagery. Hence, the pathos of the reptilian is most fully brought out.
ReplyDeleteThe title aptly presages the poem with its reference to 'depth'. The poem itself opens with a reference to the salamander, a peculiar creature; this compounds a sense of the mysterious and exotic developed by the title. It is incredible. Hence, the 'eccentric' character rumoured of the salamander is most clearly exploited. This foregrounds the poem. The mention of 'depths untamed' and the 'mysterious' salamander compound the sense of the reptilian mystique. The poem further examines the salamander's setting: a 'raiment of fire.' Hence, an inconstant element safeguards the salamander's mystery. Hence, the salamander becomes almost a elemental, its fire lighting the way for the following points.
The reptilian is hence similar to rumours of cultural Marxism, which rumoured form in fact is merely a skewed interpretation of actual reptilian influence. Nonetheless, retaining the mystique of the oblique salamander, it remains peculiar in this peculiar form. However, others may not truly comprehend it, at least not without complex meditative techniques. Hence, to many this ancient and modern wisdom is a 'closed book.' Yet the author acknowledges this, with their reference to 'arcane' fire. Hence, they are aware of these possibilities.
Their reference to the reptile 'striking' foreshadows the later reference to the aggressive komodo. Hence, the hidden-ness of reptilians is also a threat to others. They are hence 'conspiratorial' in some way, which arises innately. Along with the fire, we have also the image of the desert. In this isolation, the reptilian moves freely and in tune with the area. Hence, the reptilian movement is cleverly distilled into a series of vivid images.
To summarise, this piece of reptilian poetry does a credit to its kind. It gives a fresh, exciting and exquisite take on the elements, one which they should be proud of. While the peculiar choice of rhyming 'freely' with 'steely,' in the final couplet of the sonnnet, might seem out-of-place, they aptly juxtapose these traits of the reptilian in a careful manner. Nonetheless, this is not characteristic, in this poem. It has so few problems, that it will be accounted as a historic treatment of the sonnet. Hence, this poem is worth any reader's time. I hope to have illustrated the poem, both in its flaws and its virtues, as clearly as any could.
This poem is a stellar piece of poetry, for all reptilians. Its depiction of the world is as exquisite as its use of the sonnet form is classically Petrarchan. From the opening image of the salamander, it never looks back, and continues with exotic and sensitive imagery. Hence, the pathos of the earthly order is most fully brought out.
ReplyDeleteThe title is slightly New Romantic, however this is quickly redeemed by assimilating this back into terms of contemporary ie. reptilian poetry. The poem itself opens with a reference to the salamander, a peculiar creature; this compounds a sense of the mysterious and exotic developed by the title. It is incredible. Hence, the 'occult' character rumoured of the salamander is most clearly exploited. This foregrounds the poem. The mention of 'depths untamed' and the 'mysterious' salamander compound the sense of the virtues of obscurity. The poem further examines the salamander's setting: a 'raiment of fire.' Hence, an inconstant element safeguards the salamander's mystery. Hence, the salamander becomes almost a fire god, its fire lighting the way for the following points.
The reptilian is hence similar to the 'flickering light,' in its ability to take on 'many strange forms,' and hence also to 'flicker'. Nonetheless, retaining the mystique of the oblique salamander, it remains peculiar in this peculiar form. However, others may not truly comprehend it, at least not fully. Hence, to many this ancient and modern wisdom is a 'closed book.' Yet the author acknowledges this, with their reference to 'arcane' fire. Hence, they are aware of these possibilities.
Their reference to the reptile 'striking' foreshadows the later reference to the aggressive komodo. Hence, the hidden-ness of reptilians is also a threat to others. They are hence 'conspiratorial' in some way, which arises innately. Along with the fire, we have also the image of the barren desert. In this isolation, the reptilian moves freely and in tune with the area. Hence, the reptilian movement is cleverly distilled into a series of evocative images.
To summarise, this piece of reptilian poetry is, as is typical for the reptilian in this field, astounding. It gives a fresh, exciting and reptilian take on the elements, one which they should be proud of. While the peculiar choice of rhyming 'freely' with 'steely,' in the final couplet of the sonnnet, might seem out-of-place, they aptly juxtapose these traits of the reptilian in a striking manner. Nonetheless, this is not characteristic, in this poem. It has so few problems, that it will be accounted as a historic treatment of the sonnet. Hence, this poem is worth any reader's time. I hope to have illustrated the poem, both in its flaws and its virtues, as clearly as any could.
This poem is a stellar piece of poetry, for all reptilians. Its depiction of the world is as exciting as its use of the sonnet form is immaculate. From the imagery of fire upon a lizard, it never looks back, and continues with exotic and sensitive imagery. Hence, the pathos of the subversive is most fully brought out.
ReplyDeleteThe title is slightly New Romantic, however this is quickly redeemed by assimilating this back into terms of contemporary ie. reptilian poetry. The poem itself opens with a reference to the salamander, a peculiar creature; this compounds a sense of the mysterious and exotic developed by the title. It is deep. Hence, the 'occult' character rumoured of the salamander is most clearly exploited. This foregrounds the masterpiece. The mention of 'depths untamed' and the 'mysterious' salamander compound the sense of the reptilian mystique. The poem further examines the salamander's setting: a 'raiment of fire.' Hence, an inconstant element safeguards the salamander's mystery. Hence, the salamander becomes almost an elemental, its fire lighting the way for the following points.
The reptilian is hence similar to the 'flickering light,' in its ability to take on 'many strange forms,' and hence also to 'flicker'. Nonetheless, retaining the mystique of the oblique salamander, it remains peculiar in this peculiar form. However, others may not truly comprehend it, at least not without complex meditative techniques. Hence, to many this ancient and modern wisdom is a 'closed book.' Yet the author acknowledges this, with their reference to 'arcane' fire. Hence, they are aware of these possibilities.
Their reference to the reptile 'striking' foreshadows the later reference to the aggressive komodo. Hence, the hidden-ness of reptilians is also a threat to others. They are hence 'conspiratorial' in some way, which arises innately. Along with the fire, we have also the image of the exquisitely described desert. In this isolation, the reptilian moves freely and in tune with the area. Hence, the reptilian movement is cleverly distilled into a series of evocative images.
To summarise, this piece of reptilian poetry is, as is typical for the reptilian in this field, astounding. It gives a fresh, exciting and exquisite take on the elements, one which they should be proud of. While the peculiar choice of rhyming 'freely' with 'steely,' in the final couplet of the sonnnet, might seem out-of-place, they aptly juxtapose these traits of the reptilian in a striking manner. Nonetheless, this is not characteristic, in this poem. It has so few problems, reptilians everywhere must celebrate it. Hence, this poem is worth any reader's time. I hope to have illustrated the poem, both in its flaws and its virtues, as clearly as any could.